Gleaming White Smile

can you tell me what you think of this poem? BEWARE: its pretty long?

Please…
Don’t overwhelm me with those deep brown eyes
that are constantly focused on me.
Don’t dazzle me
with the gleaming white teeth,
that you reveal every time you smile
that breathtaking crooked smile.
Please…
Don’t drag me any closer
with those same inquisitive eyes
Don’t hold me any longer,
for I can’t stand it
when you let me go
Please…
Don’t hug me any tighter
against your warm, inviting body
Don’t drive me insane
when your soft, cautious lips
are pressed intensely against mine
Please…
Don’t make me laugh hysterically out loud
while we enjoy each other’s sheer presence.
Don’t make me feel guilty
on that rare day you get frustrated
I already know: It was my fault
Please…
Don’t leave me speechless
when you apologize for not being the best.
Don’t break my heart
when there is a cold edge
to those always-caring words you speak.
Please, try to understand
All I want, is to be with you

I’ll tell you what: this is a fantastic poem. As I’ve experienced most of these feelings, I can personally relate to them, and feel them for myself, again and again.

However, I do have one question: why is it your fault? Why can you not be the solution, not the problem? I’ve always seen the one I love as the solutions to my problems, not the cause of them.

Still, I love the poem. If you could change just that, I think it would be perfect. Maybe say something like, “What can I do? I’m here to help.” That would be so, so, so much better.

[MMV] Down with love